Raven’s February Indie eBook Review: Marked


'Marked' cover art

Credit: Felicity Hunt

Author: Felicity Hunt
Title: Marked
Genre: Erotica/Paranormal Romance
ISBN: 9781311943552
‘Like many adopted children, Teal Rhines has always wondered about her biological parents. Who they were. Why they’d abandoned her. In all of her imaginings, she’s never gotten close to the truth: her parents were vampire hunters. When her new bodyguard, the attractive Elias Bane, shows interest in her, she never dreams that he is a part of the same supernatural world that her mother fled’


I have my own thing! It took long enough. ^_^
I give you… the fireball!

fire ball to be used in raven's reviews

Credit: georges-dahdouh

Hurray! So… instead of stars I’ll use this neat little fireball (in the same way) to mark out my reviews.
Hope you like it.


I almost feel like this should be one of Ileandra’s books. Almost. It has vampires and stuff, but it also has some juicy, juicy sex, so there we go.

Cover:

Five-Flame-Rating

I have a soft spot for covers like this. I don’t know why. I just do. The big face, the little bit of detail at the bottom and then the simple lines of the text. I even like the hint of colour splash in those eyes. It isn’t, however, the sort of cover I’d go for if I didn’t already know I was getting erotica. There are lots of covers like this out there; but that, in of itself, makes it successful. Nice work.

Story:

Two-Flame-Rating

Darn. I had a Facebook conversation a few weeks ago about exactly this problem. A bit like Ileandra’s January book, I’ve read this one before. Over and over and over. -_-
Extraordinarily beautiful (and she knows it!) girl meets dark, brooding handsome man. Is mysteriously attracted to him. Sexual tension smoulders until eruption point. Man reveals secret destiny/past/family of girl which he is privy to because he is also a vampire/werewolf/god/wizard whatever.

Meriel sums up the problem way better than me, not with this book specifically, but with many paranormal/fantasy titles out there at the moment:

(Boring female character) has a hard life of (being an orphan/being homeless/having an abusive boyfriend/being beaten by nuns) until she (runs away/nearly died/actually dies/ gets bitten by a vampire) and she meets the dark and dangerous (insert male with silly name) who is obsessed with her and reveals to her her destiny of (being an assassin/being vampire/being a weird magical creature hybrid/joining a motorcycle gang/ becoming a leprechaun). In the progress she also catches the attention of (insert other male with silly name) who is also obsessed with her wants her for his own.

Reproduced with permission (thanks chick!).
Yeah. I mean… it’s a formula that works (rather like the cover) but it’s possible to use a formula and still make it your own. For me, this book failed to do that.
Without going into spoilers Meriel’s joke actually sums it all up pretty neatly and the story left me wanting more. Way more. I managed to keep reading, but that was mainly because I wanted to know if I was soon going to be wowed by something special.

Characters:

Three-Flame-RatingTeal (daft name) felt horribly self centred to me. I know its a real character trait and that I’m not required to like every character I read about (nor should I), but I found it hard to empathise with her. She talked about herself far too much; background that had little to no bearing on the tale being told.
Elias, I did like. His moody, broody, darkness would probably be too much for some people, but I enjoyed him. I enjoyed his looks, his personality, his history… everything about him except his dialogue. 😦 It felt forced and over done the entire time. Yes, the difference between himself and Teal (and everyone else for that matter) needs to be clear, but nobody talks like that. No one. I don’t care when they were born, how old they are or what they’ve been through. Not if they live in a contemporary world (which he does) and not if he doesn’t want to get punched regularly.

Overall experience:

Three-Flame-Rating

A good read. Well formatted and mostly error free. There was one small instance right near the begin where the narrative switched from first person to third person, for no reason whatsoever (not that I could fathom anyway). It then switched right back and continued as though nothing had ever happened.
To me, that suggests either a file error (wrong version, new upload required etc) or an editor was having an off day. Which ever it was, it was enough to make me dock a fireball.
I took another star off because somewhere near the middle the contractions and style of narrative just got weird. We got some ‘would’ves,’ ‘should’ves’ in there which drives me absolutely crazy outside of dialogue. They don’t read well and they seem like a bit of a mismatch.

Final score:

Three-Flame-Rating

Final score 3.25… three fireballs.
In closing I don’t think I’d call this an erotic novella. Yes there are some steamy scenes, but it would make more sense to classify it as romance. The story talks about Teal’s growing feelings for Elias and it’s very sensual. It lacks a the little bit of grit that would make it erotic in my mind. Worse than that, and this, I’m afraid, is a spoiler:

The steamiest scenes in the book, which for me were the most erotic, weren’t even real! They were dreams and therefore don’t even count. Not really. The only ‘real’ scene was very good, but, again, more romantic than erotic.

To read the spoiler, highlight the blank space above (neat trick I learned in my MSN forum based RPG days).
There. That’s me done. I’ll have another one of these for you next month.

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About Raven ShadowHawk

I take great pleasure in writing erotica and am merely one side of the proverbial coin. My other half, 'Ileandra Young' writes fantasy and the occasional comedy piece. My six-part series 'Meeting Each Other' is available in full, through Amazon and Smashwords while my debut novella 'Sugar Dust' is now re-released (!) available through Amazon via Little Vamp Press.
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