First let me offer apologies to any of you who offered me a critique last week if I haven’t come back to you. It’s been a whirlwind week and I’ve barely been online at all, let alone had the space to give your brilliant words the attention they deserve. I hope to do better this time around.
I’m not going to natter on like I normally do; I’ll just say that this is the last section from my WIP that I’ll offer for a bit, since I haven’t written anything fresh for a while. Daniel, having agonised over it for a while, has slipped into the autopsy room to have a look at the body that he believes to be the wrong one.
“You’ve seen a dead body before, Dan,” he scolded, “get a grip.”
His racing heart refused to take the sensible advice and instead thudded harder against his ribs. The dry surface of his tongue stuck to the roof of his mouth for several seconds before he could work moisture back into it.
The body, when he reached the table, drew a sigh from Daniel’s mouth and a slump from his shoulders. “You’re supposed to be crispy.” He whispered.
Eyes closed, hands folded across the chest, the man on the dissecting table might have been sleeping. No signs of injury were obvious on his face or shoulders and when Daniel lifted the sheet, he found the same lower down.
He pulled the sheet away fully and let it fall around his ankles.
Long, dark hair fanned around the peaceful face and over the broad, square shoulders.
“You can’t be the guy who fell off the bridge.”
A gleam of silver caught his eye. Alongside the shoulder lay something bright, metallic. Daniel picked it up, hissing with pain as the scalpel sliced his thumb. “What the hell is that doing there?”
Blood welled from the deep cut and fell onto the dissecting table.
“Shit!” Whirling round, Daniel scanned the walls for a towel dispenser. He found none and clutched his thumb with the free hand to catch the blood. The crimson fluid flowed freely between his fingers and splattered the upturned face on the slab.
Dun dun duuuuuuuuhn!
Anyway, yeah. Going forward I’m going to concentrate on actually getting more of this story down, so future snippets will be from other works. I’ll come back to this later in the year. ^_^
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