Six Sentence Sunday 27/11


Another Six Sentence Sunday! I love this. ๐Ÿ˜€

Behold! Another six sentences from Silk Over Razor Blades, the piece currently on the look out for willing beta readers. This time following a slightly later part of the story and another character. Bwa ha ha ha ha haa ah a hahaa!

Every fibre of his body sang with an ecstasy so powerful that his throat temporarily closed off. His heart rate rocketed. Purple stars danced across his sight and in his jeans a hot, sticky dampness began to spread.

Slipping down to his knees, Jason tried to ride the wave; struggled to regain control of his mind and wrest it back from the intruding stranger who was shouting, sobbing, now screaming as, miles away, they rode the intense upsurge of a devastating orgasm.

When the sensation dissipated, Jason found himself lying flat on the floor, his arms flung out wide, blood roaring in his ears. Clear sight returned by degrees; brightly coloured stars winking out to leave behind the muggy grey of the winter sky.

Wow, this really does reveal something to me about my writing style. Some of my sentences are uber long! May need to fiddle with that. o.O
Six Sentence Sunday

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About Ileandra Young

I'm a thirty-*mumbles* year old (purple loving, cheese worshipping) author of fantasy, juggling a pair of beautiful twin boys with my burning desire to make up stories and write them all down. When I get the chance, I play games, listen to music, and in days long past I even ran a radio show. Though I occasionally write non-fiction, my heart lives in fantasy and my debut novel, Silk Over Razor Blades is now available through Amazon along with part two of the trilogy, Walking The Razor's Edge.
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12 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday 27/11

  1. Alix Cameron says:

    Vivid description, well done!

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  2. Zee Monodee says:

    Oh, I love your voice in this, the way you turn this scene into such an evocative piece! Great job ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. Ruthie says:

    Goodness! He just got well and truly f*cked. Fun!

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  4. Vivien Dean says:

    Great description and sense of the moment! Thanks for sharing. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. NOpe. That’s what makes tehe description so real and vivid for the reader…IMHO

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