Six Sentence Sunday 01/04 (8)


I’m enjoying myself a great deal giving you these little snippets!

The response to the opening of this short story (The First Time) is very encouraging and I can’t help but want to give you more! This post and last week’s offering brings us up to today; Lara has just invited Vicky into bed, but Vicky is a little nervous.

What will she do?

My muscles froze, each one needing especial effort to loosen before I could move.

I eased off my slippers, pushing them against the wall and sliding my socks off by rubbing my feet against the carpet. My feet tingled in the cool air, a marked contrast to the flush flooding my chest and face when Lara lifted the sheets, inviting me in.

The steady rhythm of her breathing made her chest rise and fall, her breasts dancing against the underside of the sheets.

“Come on, everyone’s gone, right?”

“Fifteen minutes ago, its just us.”

Vicky’s roaming eyes and Lara’s impatience are all you get this week. I hope you’ve enjoyed them!

Tune in next week for another saucy six and, in the meantime, further entertain yourselves by clicking the banner to find other writers taking part in Six Sentence Sunday.

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About Ileandra Young

I am a twenty-nine year old writer currently juggling a pair of beautiful twin boys with my burning desire to make up stories and write them all down. When I get the chance, I play games, listen to music, and in days long past I even ran a radio show. Though I occasionally write non-fiction, my heart lives in fantasy and my debut novel is due for release in Autmn 2014.
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10 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday 01/04 (8)

  1. Cara Bristol says:

    Nice, nice writing. I liked the way she removed her slippers and socks. I definitely would read more.

  2. I love your detail with the socks and the carpet – little things like that help me relate to the character! :)

  3. silverj says:

    Nice “showing” of the scene. The reader gets a sense of the characters from their actions.

  4. jeanettelgrey says:

    Saucy indeed! Great moment of anticipation.

  5. jeanettelgrey says:

    Saucy indeed! Love the moment of anticipation.

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